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A twist on a classic story...

Princess, why won't you wake up?
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Scorpion-Pack Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013
Is it Aurora's pov before she pricks her finger
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Open for interpretation. :) 
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SpiritedSloth Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
finally
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
lol what?
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AkatsukiLoverXDX3 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Professional General Artist
Deeeeep...
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I know...
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AkatsukiLoverXDX3 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
That's all I can say about this..Good job. :3
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks! :)
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Mission-46 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
Great poem!!! Nice to see, love isn't always roses in poetry. We have to go through lots of trials to find out what real love is and bethere to show (in actions) the true meaning. Tc and God bless
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Pretty much, I guess everything takes time... thank you! Take care and god bless to you too!
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karmacursed Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is pretty good. The line about the 'cold wars' struck me as out of time and place for the rest of the setting. Third line from the end would read better (to me) if the 'and' was taken out of it, same with the word 'had' in the second line from the end. Other than that it's top notch. Nice work, life isn't all fairytales, sunshine and rainbows is it? lol
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you for the feedback! I will put that into consideration! nope life isn't even close to that. Thanks for reading!
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Wershaw Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I lost my princess
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I'm sorry to hear that. :( I hope you find a new one. :)
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Wershaw Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Happens... thanks :)
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
anytime :iconsupertighthugplz:
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livetodance123 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student General Artist
its tragicly beautiful, i love it!
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you!
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cherimonlover1209 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
disney but in real life , amazingly written , i actually cried because this is soooo me :facepalm:
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you! And i am sorry to heart that. I hope it gets better whatever it is. Just remember the greatest miracles happen in the worst storms.
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cherimonlover1209 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
your welcome :) ,haha thank you , your very kind :heart:
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you, i try! and your welcome...anytime. :)
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BellaGBear Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
nice, like it. Very different that the boring disney fairytale. Way better!
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Haha thank you!
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KaibaKitty Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Some of the wording is awkward. For example, in the first stanza, "she and her prince meet" rather than "her prince and her." Further down, "Alone, she faced the dragon and all of it's tricks" makes a bit more sense. And finally, the last line might sound better as "and a single kiss was no longer her love's cost."

That being.said, I really enjoyed this. I love the theme and also the dark twist. It was a sad yet pleasant twist on a princess story, which I loved because it just goes to show that not all stories have happy endings. I think you have talent and I hope to see more of your work in the future!
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you for your feedback I will definitely use what you said to improve my work! I appreciate it as I am fairly new to poetry! Thanks again for looking and i promise for much more works in the future!
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JecOlantern Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
it became a tragedy...I think the most unexpected turn of events make this piece really interesting. :iconthumbsupplz: good job!
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you!
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M-Victoria-W Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This s amazing. Infact I actually find it beautiful, kind of inspiring in a way. A lovely twist, great originality and thought in this! A huge well done :D
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
That's what i was going for :D Thank you!
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Arashka Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
Although I would have appreciated a positive ending (I'm such a girl .. nevermind me) I totally like the theme! I think it's a good theme for a song or a drama. Good job!
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I, myself Lately i have been wondering why my poems don't end with a happy ending. But I think just because they don't, doesn't mean there will never be one. Thank you for reading! and (it's okay happy endings are nice :D)
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Arashka Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012
I know, I have a similiar problem lately, my poems are often very darkly and post apocalyptic xD don't no where this comes from xD
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eternalobserver Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
What an incredible poem! A bit sad yes, but still. Of course we can't always find the things we're looking for no matter how hard we search or work for it. But at least no one can say that she didn't stick with it until the very end! Here's to the love between the heroine and her prince eventually bringing them together " Happily Ever After :D "!
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Remember just because the poem didn't end with a happily ever after, doesn't mean there will never be one :) Thanks for reading!
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eternalobserver Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012
You're welcome! And yeah you're right! Just because I didn't read it in the poem itself doesn't nesscessarily mean that it doesn't or can't happen right after the end of it! Thanks for reminding me! :D
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
haha anytime :D
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misguidedeyes Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Love. It. Like WOW.. I really love the ending :D
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thanks! :)
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xxatouchofrostxx Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is sad, but reality is harsh. Nicely written poem :)
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you! and yep, you know what they say, when the rain falls, it pours.
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xxatouchofrostxx Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yea :( Very nice -^-^-
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
thank you!
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I-Blixy Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like your poem. It's sad but still good :)
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you!
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zhaleh Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012
You've said it all dear, love it!
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you!
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DolliBKS Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student General Artist
"But she was gone, her love's price was no longer a single kiss as the cost"
*_____* ohh
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OnlyOliveOil Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
BURNNNN!!!! Lol thanks for reading!!!!
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xUsako Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
    I guess that's what you get for being swept away by fairytales
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