This is pretty good. The line about the 'cold wars' struck me as out of time and place for the rest of the setting. Third line from the end would read better (to me) if the 'and' was taken out of it, same with the word 'had' in the second line from the end. Other than that it's top notch. Nice work, life isn't all fairytales, sunshine and rainbows is it? lol
Some of the wording is awkward. For example, in the first stanza, "she and her prince meet" rather than "her prince and her." Further down, "Alone, she faced the dragon and all of it's tricks" makes a bit more sense. And finally, the last line might sound better as "and a single kiss was no longer her love's cost."
That being.said, I really enjoyed this. I love the theme and also the dark twist. It was a sad yet pleasant twist on a princess story, which I loved because it just goes to show that not all stories have happy endings. I think you have talent and I hope to see more of your work in the future!
Thank you for your feedback I will definitely use what you said to improve my work! I appreciate it as I am fairly new to poetry! Thanks again for looking and i promise for much more works in the future!
I, myself Lately i have been wondering why my poems don't end with a happy ending. But I think just because they don't, doesn't mean there will never be one. Thank you for reading! and (it's okay happy endings are nice )
What an incredible poem! A bit sad yes, but still. Of course we can't always find the things we're looking for no matter how hard we search or work for it. But at least no one can say that she didn't stick with it until the very end! Here's to the love between the heroine and her prince eventually bringing them together " Happily Ever After "!